tag:blogger.com,1999:blog-1504929817457614609.post4056319673809843709..comments2014-12-05T08:20:47.533-08:00Comments on Inconsistent Ramblings: August 22, 2014abbey nicholehttp://www.blogger.com/profile/09636766867824318509noreply@blogger.comBlogger1125tag:blogger.com,1999:blog-1504929817457614609.post-32729813025764289242014-08-27T19:50:12.387-07:002014-08-27T19:50:12.387-07:00Vivid opening here, Abbey. I really like the image...Vivid opening here, Abbey. I really like the imagery--and the background you give readers of your blog. A couple of style things:<br /><br />"I had felt more helpless under the water than I ever had, and for a seven-year-old who already felt helpless a majority of the time, that terrified me."<br /><br />"Standing here though, in my backyard with my arms around this shaking girl I swear I love,"<br /><br />Curiosity 2/2 interesting background<br />Inspiration 3/3<br />Explanation/examples 3/3<br />Terms 2/2<br />Writing 2/2<br />12/12Anonymousnoreply@blogger.com